月考作文 小汽车的利与弊.ppt

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【作文要求】现在越来越多的人购买小汽车,假设你是张伟,请根
据下列表格所提示的信息,给报社编辑写一封信,发表你对此的
看法。词数100左右。
优点
,能来去自如



缺点:
更多的交通事故
建议:政府要适当控制小汽车的数量
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