第一篇文章的复盘和第二篇文章的主体第一段（0709）.doc

第一篇文章的复盘和第二篇文章的主体第一段（0709）.docIn many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society? 老年人复盘的要求: 1不看范文,可以使用词伙,也可以不使用,自己写出来 2要写 ABC ,还有确定至少两种拓展方法(按照我上课的方式), 很多同学只是按照词伙企图回忆和重写文章,那样效果就不是最好,最好就是将作文 8步法重新做一遍,熟悉这个过程 3规定时间(大概 8分钟一段) 4我一般批改的时候,有些普遍的错误,我会修改,我不修改的错误(主要是中国式英文和表达),请自己对照范文这样的复盘才有意义和感觉! 可以更加深刻记忆词伙表达,对比思维的差异,看到中心句的差异,拓展的差异记住, 6分的学生注意表达和语法 7分的学生注意思维和拓展 An increase in production of consumer goods results in damage to the natural environment. What are the causes and possible solutions? 环境 A生产增加 B对能源的需求加大 C能源开采造成环境破坏 034 同学,小错误比较多,注意 TR ,尽量避免重复,注意七种拓展的方法,还有并列句的使用 分 It will have a negative effect on the (多余) economic growth if the country have ( has 主谓不一致) an aging of( 多余) population, some of the labor-intensive industries might face the shortage of problem of labour shortage may hold back the country ’s economic development ,especially panies which rely on manual work. 006 同学语法错误太多 分 When a country has so much ( people 是可数名词) older people ,it ’s economic ( economy ) will be easily affected ina bad of labour shortage ,the development of economic will slow down, On this condition, ( in this case ) When you see some labour-intensive industry,you can not find enough energized ( 没这词) workers there, Another problem is that growing aging (多余) population will impose much (多余 a) burden on taxpayers.